Saturday, October 10, 2009

It was a nice warm summer morning in June, and all my friends and I met up at Nick's house. We were going for a bike ride early in the morning. We went around the neighborhood and had bike races with each other. After that, we played dodge ball tag in Tony's huge yard, we'd usually chase each other around the house a few times until we got bored. Later we went to Zach's house and helped his mom with some chores, she paid us all $20. Then, she took us to Volcano Fall's (which is like a small amusement park), where we did mini golfing, go-carting, laser-tag, and the arcade room. It was really fun. We decided to relax after that and go to Seth's house and play HALO, Call Of Duty, and Gears Of War on his XBox 360. Later, we had an air-soft gun fight by the condos. I liked using machine guns, because that's what gun I did best with. I preferred either an Oozy, or an AK-47. Afterward, we went night swimming in Tony's pool, the pool water was cool, and it felt like a nice cool breeze hitting you after a hot day. It was like swimming in air. Finally, I slept over at Tony's house with Nick, and obviosly Tony. We stayed up all night watching T.V. and joking around. It was a very fun summer day.

4 comments:

  1. This is a nice recount of what you did, but I'd really like to hear some focused detail with some sensory description. Perhaps a smaller focus would make that easier.

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  2. I agree with Clear. You described too many things at once. You could've focused on only one of the things that happened.

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  3. It could've been less broad of a description. Typing it in word would help with spelling.

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  4. Who's Nick?

    But otherwise it sounds interesting. Fun right?

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